The student was asked to write a short story about a mysterious book that grants magical powers to its reader. The story should develop characters, a plot around the magical book, use descriptive language, and reflect on the magical powers' effect.

YOUR ANSWERAs I flipped the pages of the dusty old book, I noticed that many pages were missing. I found this book in my attic. It looked mysterious and caught my eye immediately. It looked very rustic, and odd. The name of the book was Mysterious night of Armageddon. I ran to pick up my sister from her work. I held the book firmly and as I flipped the book it started glowing. Glowing in a magical way. I had never seen a book glow without a phone inside it. Soon I fell asleep, my body felt weak as if I was sucked inside the book. Soon I woke up "Surely It was a dream" I told myself. I was still in the attic. So I ran downwards, I ran towards my kitchen as I was really hungry. But I was shocked as my mom scolded me as my mom was making food, I was shocked as my room sister's hostel was a day trip from my home. I approached my mom with small steps she turned around and I was shocked. She had noisily, big, beady eyes, burning red eyes. I ran backwards to the attic and closed the shutter below me. I saw my mom running behind me. I fell on my knees and started crying. The shutter started rumbling. I was very scared of my own mother! The knock grew louder and my hands started rumbling. I held the book again and prayed I will go back from where I was, nothing happened. My heart broke down, I started sweating badly, The knocks grew louder and louder. I fell to the ground and started crying, soon I fell asleep for a long time. Soon, I woke up shook my head, I was in my bed and my mom was standing there scolding me that I was late. I thought to myself what the heck happened and I came to a conclusion it was just a .... Dream or was it.....

SOLUTIONStorytelling and Creativity: A clear and engaging plot should be developed around the magical book.
Character Development: Characters should be fully developed with complex personalities.
Use of Descriptive Language: Vivid and imaginative language should be used.
Reflection on Magical Powers: The story should provide a deep reflection on the consequences and changes brought about by the magical powers.

18/30

The student's story shows some originality and has an interesting premise involving the mysterious book. However, the plot appears to be more of a series of events rather than a cohesive story with a defined beginning, middle, and conclusion focused on the magical book.

13/20

Characters in the story lack depth as there is little development provided for either the protagonist or the mother. The interaction with the book is also quite brief and does not offer substantial insight into the characters' emotions or thoughts.

12/20

Descriptive language is present, specifically with the glowing book and the mother's transformation. However, more descriptive details would enhance the setting and emotional experience.

8/10

The story includes some reflection on the effects of magical powers, particularly through the protagonist's experiences and emotions. It could be explored more deeply for greater impact.

14/20

The story has some grammatical errors and inconsistencies in tense. Still, they do not significantly hinder comprehension, and the narrative voice is mostly clear.

65/100

Sid, your story presents a captivating idea and shows promise in terms of creativity and imagination. Focusing on creating a more structured plot and deeper character development can make your storytelling even more compelling. Additionally, utilizing more vivid and sensory descriptive language will allow your readers to immerse themselves fully in the world you’ve created. Reflecting more deeply on the consequences and complexities of the magical powers at play will add depth to your narrative. Keep practicing your grammar and mechanics to ensure your writing flows smoothly. Keep up the good work and continue to develop your storytelling skills!